Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
Nightfall. Nighttime. Night. Darkness. Stars. Moon. Wait... moon? Moon, round and bright. Crescent shaped. Moon. Sun? No, sun is gone. No sun. Good. Sun is bad. Sun is evil. Darkness is good. Darkness is perfection.

Now we build.

Bit by bit, block by block. Darkness consumes, but no matter. Moonlight enough, more then enough. So I build-- we build. They are not far, but I am alone. Black skin. White eyes. Long arms. Long legs. Tall, too tall. Building, always building (but why?)

Sandcastles (previous night). Wooden tower (not mine). Waves of the ocean--



away get away

get away get away
get away get away--



I escaped. Water far away. Keep it away. Building again. Towers, pyramids, anything, everything. Far away, they are far away. I cannot see them. Oh well, must build, they will be fine.

Small tower, getting larger. No joy, never joy, must build. Resources, need them now. Sand easy to aquire, dirt harder...


Watched. Am I being watched?

Turning, turning, AH! Eyes! Person! Being!


It stares at me. It is watching me. I will watch it. It wants my building. It wants my things, my resources. It wants me to DIE.

Posession. MY THINGS! MINE. I will destroy it. The staring thing. Why does it watch me? Why else would it? Attack. Must attack. When it turns away... Attack. Attack. Fists. Rage, ever consuming. Tear it apart. Use its head. Yes. Place it atop the built thing. Blood. Yes. YES! It will not destroy. No.


Staring. Forever. Scared. It is scared. Eyes wide. Fast breathing. Not that far away.
Brethren. Where are they? Must find them. Later, though. First, must watch. Must destroy.

It has weapons. They glint in the moonlight Fear. Scared. I am scared. It can destroy me. Destroy my buidling. Rip me apart--



I will wait. Attack unnanounced. Destroy. Kill. Yes.

"Hello?" It speaks.

IT SPEAKS. It wants me to respond. Will not give satisfaction. No. Cannot respond. Whatever. Whatever. Eyes on pickaxe. Yes. Use to mine resources. To build. Yes! Eyes on sword. Shimering in moonlight. Moon. Overhead now. Night is ending soon. Must attack. Must kill. Protect me, protect building.

Unimpressed. Frowning. Wanted me to be weak. Wanted me to crawl away. Yes. Yes. Evil thing. Must die. Must die.

Stare. Stare. Stare. Stare.

Moving away. Yes. Perfect.

I am still.

It blinks.

It turns.


I jump.

Running. Jumping. Sand gone. Building behind me.



Golden sword out. Golden sword for defense. Claws (my claws) ripping into it. Screaming. It is screaming in pain. My ears, MY EARS! I attack harder. I rip harder. Slashed at by sword. Black blood oozing from me. Attack more. Rip. Tear. Hit. Punch Rip Hit Tear Rip AttackHitTearRip...

Screaming subsides. Blood gushing everywhere. Everywhere. Sticky mess. Like water, but less. Good.

I turn. Green thing stares. Black eyes. Fear. It explodes (can explode). Destroy everthing I create! Will not attack. Cannot attack. It hisses.
Upset? I stole its kill?
Bonecrushing fear. Fear. Fear!


"Hisssssss." Silent. Will it explode?


And it retreats. Tension ceases. Relief.

And I am alone, body bleeding, tools lying on the ground. No mouth, cannot smile, but feel good. Yes. Tools! Lifting the blue pickaxe. Joy. Unending joy. I can build faster. (Build more.) Shovels. Good. Armor too small (covered in blood). Moon glinting off the surface. What? Axe. Axe. For trees? Wood! Create better structures. Wood. Helpful.

My bag now. My tools now.

Discard the sword (claws work better). Leave the body. Cannot carry head. Leave it. Return to structure. Moon only watches. Others come, watch my progress. Pride, but not done. Never done.

Digging until morning. Mining until morning. And then we hide.



Jesus Christ on a stick, thank you my lovelies for the amazing comments, and the amazing feedback. I'm glad you like it as much as you do! I implore you (shameless self advertising) to check out my other Minecraft fanfictions. Thanks a bunch!

So in this upcoming Minecraft update, there's going to be a new mob called the Enderman <3 The second I heard how it acts, I simply HAD to write something for it. Mind you, I know very little about these thingies, so I winged most of it.

The creeper hisses as a kind of warning (since its not intent on exploding Mr. Enderman here) and I know that's not how it works in the game, but bear with me.

Minecraft does not belong to me. Neither does the Enderman.
Add a Comment:
Critique by TheVolcaronaMaster Mar 20, 2012, 10:13:35 PM
This was perfect. The writing gives me the idea of being inside an Enderman's head and you portrayed this beautifully with the choppy sentences and repeating words. However, I docked some points because at some points the text did not feel right. Black blood oozing from me. The sentence loses the same style and rhythm used on previous ones, making it a little awkward to read. And I am alone, body bleeding, tools lying on the ground. Again, the sentence seems a bit too long compared to the other ones making it awkward.

Now this is an original idea. Writing something about the thoughts going on inside an Enderman is pretty unique and you show it masterfully. But of course I cannot give you full points because Enderman are the creation of someone else.

I seem to be repeating myself when I say that you portray the thoughts of an Enderman with finesse, but it's true. The way you repeated certain words and made them bigger and smaller is very impressive and makes the text more dynamic and gives it more feeling.

I am completely impressed by this piece and look forward to more.
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
103 out of 103 deviants thought this was fair.

The Artist has requested Critique on this Artwork

Please sign up or login to post a critique.

yellowfishbelly Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2016   General Artist
this is amazing! seriously! like, i can see an actor playing an enderman with this as a script. this is amazing! idk if iv ever been able to visualize a story so well! great work!
VoidOfShiningDarknes Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
This. That's all that needs to be said. Just, this. Heart 
Dav1208 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Of i see enderman... O_O Bloody end.
TheWolfgirl08 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015
This is so awsome!!! I really liked it! It is perfect!:D (Big Grin) 
ThrashHead97 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Wow this is AMAZING 
whiteclaw001 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

I love it!!!!!! Love Love Love Love Love Love Love Love Love Love Love Love *Free Icon/Emote* Ramen Pusheen *Free Icon/Emote* Ramen Pusheen Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote Mustache Poro Icon/Emote 
greendonutbot400 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
My god...You should do more like this!
ninjagoxmlpfan Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Student Artist
This Story is so cool!!!!!!!!!! I Love enderman!
BittyKitty1 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
*rolls around squealing*

Enderman are my favorite mobs on Minecraft. Finding this was amazingsauce (I read this before I had an account and was INTENT on finding it again and favoriting it when I got an account).

EndlessHell Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
OOoh a perfect text, I can now guess what Endermans are thinking *^* nice job I found it really cute :3 Enderman is my favourite character on minecraft :D <3
meanya Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
I loved it!!!
yesiplayminecraft Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Beautiful work! Amazing job! I love it!
GhostyMcspooky Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
i love this. the enderman is my favourite thing in minecraft and this is amazing
CookieMilkShake Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
This is wonderful! It shows the behavior of, in my opinion, the most mysterious mob of the whole game.
endermanlover16200 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Must. Have. MORE!!!!!!  NaNoEmo day 25 - Please? 
Aura-Shadow-Beckett Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014
I want to help him build his towers.... Please *puppy eyes*
Everlink Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
i LOVE it!!! brilliant brilliant brilliant!!! I need more!
JeffTK296 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student General Artist
*looks at enderman*Please remember me from creepy pasta!Plz Plz Plz... Endy!
DJHomePonyPasta123 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
CCrystal14 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Endermen have all the swag.
DJHomePonyPasta123 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
haha x3
smallshipper Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is sooooooo good! :iconmnrthumbsupplz: 
DaOverlordOfAwesome Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist
Oooooh! This is creepy I like it!
iSpazzyKitty Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW!! :clap: WELL DONE! The Endermen are probably my favorite mob, and this was such a creative way to write from one's point of view. It makes so much sense to have it thinking that simply, and I never would have thought to write that way. I may even say this was inspiring. I loved this! I will definitely be checking out your other Minecraft fan fics. :D
Randroid7 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. That's all I have to say
UltraSonicFanGirl Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Nice job! 

I.. WANT... MORE!!!!! :la:
bandittriggerhappy Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Awesome! :D
trystaa Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
mcmaniac27 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
This is freaking amazing!
MadeUpMiftish Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
i like you enderman (lol tender has 'ender' in it :D
minecraftendergirl Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
brandon-the-unicorn Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Holy crap I just felt so proud of myself. I read it out loud like I thought the enderman's thoughts would sound like and I LOVED IT! Amazing! Beautiful!
dlaney966 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
perfectly described
Desert-Anubis Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

I love writing like this, and this is very well done :)

Really makes you feel like you're inside an Enderman's head. ^-^
Aspentail2014 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist GOOD!!!!!!!!
GeneralSnuggles Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my God this is epic!
LegendWeaver25 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wolvesandcatscool Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
ERMAHGERD!! I love Endermen, and it's really intresting to see in their heads :) Now I know why they kill people when they look at them.... :iconendermanplz:
8BitStitchPunk Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. You capture the Enderman's thoughts so well! :love:
Quoth-the-Crow Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student General Artist
That's so interesting, it really captures his point of view!
LunaDragon6 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
oh sorry i thought it didn't poast beause of that thing asking is something was fair was blocking it. or i could just be stupid....... oh well!!
LunaDragon6 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
That was awsome! and terrifying! don't forget terrifying!
LunaDragon6 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012
That was really freckin awsome! and terrifying! don't forget terrifying!
8BitStitchPunk Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very interesting! I like it. =)
Qille Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
Wow! This was fantastic!!!! :wow: Endermen are my favorite mobs in Minecraft, so this was awesome to see what it's like in their minds! Just... wow! I have no words for this!!!! :clap: Great job!!! :iconendermanplz:
Pururu-chan Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
this is awesome :D
fellowenderman Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
it was good but not ALL endermen think like that
devilx23 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this is why i never look at endermen

great job
ToaDJacara Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
Cool :)
starwars749 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
I love this. I recently started to like the endermen. They interest me. You have shown how the endermen think. Personally this is one of the best things I have ever read. You used great detail. Do you think you will make another story about the endermen living their lives in THE END?
Add a Comment:

:iconccrystal14: More from CCrystal14

More from DeviantArt


Submitted on
August 27, 2011
File Size
4.7 KB


414 (who?)